Would you mind checking out my first short film?

i dont see nothing

 

edit: don't need two of the same vids

 

YOU GUYS SOUND LIKE HARRY POTTER! But I'm guessing that the Vampires were because of Twilight. So you only get 3 stars. I don't like Twilight. At all.

 

... no idea what just happened there.

 

I thought vampires couldn't come out during the day...

 

That was terrible. No offence, but I'm just stating the facts.

 

With the filming, I think it was quite good, nothing spectacular but consistent throughout.
However the acting/script could have done with some work, everyone seemed a bit...awkward. When she was caught by the vampires there could have been more emotion, her saying "oh bugger" or whatever ruined any tension. Also when you came across the body your friend could have displayed more emotion.
It felt like you were running out of time so you just ended up getting killed to finish it off.

Also why was your friend with glasses being a Zombie?

 

I skipped through most of it,

It reminded me of,

- 28 Days Later
- Twilight

Aside from that, the Red Head was cute.

 

Okay, acting and script aside, the filming was very good for a first attempt at something long. The shots when the three characters go to investigate were my personal favourite, although they made it seem like they went pretty far away, too far to have heard anything really =P But they shots were interesting and ascetically pleasing.

A few little things, you could probably lose "The next day" narration, as the scene goes from night to day so it's already clear that it's the next day.
In some places it was really hard to hear what characters were saying, I'm guessing this is a limitation of the camera more than anything, but you should try to compensate for it by getting your actors to speak louder or by arranging the scene differently to boost the acoustics.
The lighting was a strong point and a weak point of the short. In some places it worked well, such as the dark shot from inside the barn? to outside, and the actors walking from inside to out. Or the ending when the brick wall behind the ginger actresses seemed to be more vivid. But sometimes it was hard to see what was happening, particularly towards the end. It's hard to work with natural light if you're shooting over a single day, so it's just something to keep in mind for next time rather than something you could have fixed.


Overall, good work! I just hope you don't get any marks deducted for the bad acting or the poor script.

 

Good video. The camera work was excellent, but I agree that the acting and script needs more work. I think there should be a longer and more tense build up, with more grabbing (out of darkness) and it needs to be quick (i.e - 2-3 seconds). There should be more blood, make up would have been good (maybe blackened out faces with red blood dripping from mouth) and have some clips of the black face emerging from darkness. There also needs to be less running and chasing - that really doesn't fit in and ruins the effect - makes it look childish. I think you should have stayed in the barn area where it is dark, the bit with the vampires scratching against the conservatory was the worst bit IMO, there was too much light and you could see that the people where kids and didn't look at all like vampires. Get some black cloaks (maybe even some hockey masks), get some make up and stay in the barn. You could also use some more video effects such as greyscale video, static sections (maybe with some white noise), get rid of the music and have some silence, with some wind and creaking doors at first and then maybe a heartbeat, then screams interrupted by white noise as the victim is dragged away.

 

It's not a fact if its your opinion.

I agree with all the people who liked the camera work but think the script/acting needed improvement

 

for the sound problem - invest in a decent field mic and record voice-overs for the faraway shots. Taking voice-overs from a scene recorded on the spot with the field mic can make this sound natural.

Also don't forget to have spare charged batteries, tapes/memory sticks, and a charger on hand.

Good work so far.

What are you using to edit?

 

when you were all "drinking" i couldnt stop laughing....im sry but it was just funny watching you guys acting like that. Ive gotta agree with most people the acting stuff could use a little work but other than that good job.

I dont know what video editing software you used, however I recommend using Final Cut Pro, i use it in one of my media classes in college and its a phenomenal program.